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Sample 1st paragraph, MS Applied Mathematics and Statistics, Chinese

Your MS Degree in Applied and Computational Mathematics and Statistics Program at XXXX is my first choice for graduate school because of my profound admiration for both the interdisciplinary character of your program and your emphasis on practical applications for business and commerce. I am a Chinese woman now living in America who earned her undergraduate and Master’s degrees in Spacecraft Engineering back in China.  I have now been in America for 3 years. My daughter was born here and I have been a stay-at-home mom, improving my English and working at home as well. Most recently I have been analyzing data for two professors, one at Northwestern University and the other in India, in the area of Gen Y’s attitude towards Mobile Applications and In-app Advertising. Since my daughter will soon go to school, I want very much to go back to school as well.

Sample 1st Paragraph Undergraduate Financial Actuarial Mathematics

I am applying for entry to the undergraduate program in Financial Actuarial Mathematics. My reason for doing so is a love of, and an aptitude for, mathematics combined with a strong interest in the way that businesses operate and reach decisions. My family owns a business in which I have worked and, during this time, I have become increasingly aware of the fact that almost every business decision involves risk and that in many cases the decision maker can be greatly assisted in reaching the right decision by the quantification of the risk that they are facing. My ambition is to become an actuarial consultant aiding businesses, particularly small businesses, at times in which management is taking significant business decisions involving major changes, in order to avoid business failure or significant financial loss. 

Graduate School in Mathematics

One advantage of going to graduate school in Mathematics is that most mathematics departments support most of their students through fellowships (i.e. free money) or assistantships (i.e. teaching of grading papers). This support often covers the full costs of tuition as well as living expenses. Sometimes, however, a school will accept more students than it has resources to support. In this case, support decisions may be based on the strength of the student's academic record in relation to the chosen program of study.

Very strong students should consider applying for outside support. Of particular note is the National Science Foundation Fellowship program. The preliminary application has an early November deadline. The Department of Defense also has three separate fellowship programs, each with its own application. Their deadline is mid-January. There are also several programs for minorities.

I want to help you get admitted to graduate school in Mathematics.

I would be honored to help you gain admission to graduate school in Linguistics by drafting a most eloquent statement on your behalf. In addition to filling out my Online Interview Form, send your resume/CV and/or rough draft to my email. In addition to the Personal Statement or Statement of Purpose, the most important factors in most admission decisions are: (a) your grades in math and math-related subjects (b) the courses you took (see below) (c) your recommendations and (d) the GRE scores (The Math Subject Area Test).

The importance of the recommendations cannot be over emphasized. They are weighed very heavily in admission decisions. They should be from mathematics professors. Many students feel that their professors do not know them well enough to write a recommendation. This is often a mistake. The professor knows them through their work. The good students stand out.

There is a broad spectrum of graduate schools in the U.S with widely varying admission standards. The best advice is ``give it a try''. Some schools will accept marginal students for the Master's program on a `probationary' basis, insisting that they `prove themselves'. In such cases, they may not supply much in the way of support.

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Statements of Excellence for Admission to Graduate School in Mathematics

The Humanitarian Side of Mathematics

They named an asteroid after Jaime Escalante. They made a movie about him, and wrote a book in his name. This Bolivian math teacher´s story is a fascinating and deeply humanitarian one.

Escalante taught mathematics and physics for 12 years before he moved to the USA in the 70s. He worked odd jobs and earned another college degree at California State University until he was able to learn English and start teaching calculus to underprivileged students no one else wanted to teach.

Escalante began by convincing the students that they could control their futures with the right education—that they could get jobs in engineering, electronics and computer science if they learned math. He said, “I'll teach you math and that's your language. With that you're going to make it. You're going to college and sit in the first row, not the back, because you're going to know more than anybody."

To begin with, he received considerable criticism from the school administration where he worked. He was threatened with dismissal because he was coming into work too early, leaving too late and neglected to get administrative permission to raise funds to pay for his students´ Advanced Placement tests.

When a new principal arrived, who supported Escalante´s work by denying extracurricular activities to students who failed to maintain a C average and new students who failed basic skills tests, his work really started to have a big impact.

In 1978, he taught his first calculus class to five students, and two passed their AP calculus test. The following year, the class got bigger, and seven out of the nine students that participated passed their AP calculus test. By 1981, 14 out of 15 passed. Escalante pushed his students hard, and they really moved mountains to get the grade.

In 1982, Escalante received a lot of attention when 18 of his students passed the AP test in calculus. But 14 were asked to take the exam again, when the Educational Testing Service were suspicious because all the students made the same error and used certain variable names in their exam. Many of the students did better the second time around, and had their scores reinstated. By the early 90s, the number of people taking the advanced placement exams jumped up to 570.    

Jaime would proudly claim “The Aymara knew math before the Greeks and Egyptians”. He was a proud of his heritage. Escalante sadly passed away in 2010, aged 79, of bladder cancer.

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Jaime Escalante On Being A Math Teacher

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